The magic slide transport the boy to the blue planit lAtNn the planet thats cold the monsters were thinking the bog thought the plans the bog ran and ran the bog said ...
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Thursday, August 23, 2012
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The magic slide transport the boy to the blue planit lAtNn the planet thats cold the monsters were thinking the bog thought the plans the bog ran and ran the bog said ...
To be contued
This is a draft post.Comment for any misstates.
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To Aaron
ReplyDeleteI like how your slide is magic. That sounds really interesting.
Can you read through your writing and check it makes sense. Also, really check your spelling carefully. Make the changes in read for me so i can see your editing.
Mrs Natusch
Hi Aaron
DeletePlease check the word "sine" "thort" and "planit"
Mrs N
To Mrs N
DeleteI have changed 'sign''planet''thought'
From Aaron
To Aaron
ReplyDeleteI liked the way you started your story.
Next time you could add some more detail.
From Jade
To Jade
DeleteThank you for that comment.
Next time I'll add more detail.
FROM AARON
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To Aaron
ReplyDeleteI think you need to work on adding more detail to your writing.
Great writing.
From Katherine
To Katherine
DeleteThank-you for that comment.
I have added some adjectives.
From Aaron